I wouldnt do anything to make this better. Just learn from this and make something different next time. Sorry man, I really really didnt like it. You need a melody of some sort in it. the distortion sound wasnt nice. the drums were really weird, the ending was bad, it was repetitive. sorry dude just aint working. What music software are you using? Sometimes you just end up using the wrong stuff, if you want something that you can use to make great music fast I'd get FL Studio.
The sounds are quite nice, but the beat is too odd-metered for my liking. I also really miss some kind of main theme in it. It would also be cool with more build up and maybe a drop or two :-)