At the beginning it was really solid. But it still seemed slightly off for me. You have to be really careful when you are using this many sounds to make sure that the sounds all complement each other a bit more sometimes. I had the same issue when I made my first tracks. Sometimes less is more. I know you feel, because there are so many cool sounds and it just almost goes together all so perfectly, but just slow down, take your time, and listen carefully. You seem to have some natural music blood in you though.
Ill keep that in mind, thanks for taking the time to write so much :)
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