The percussion at the beginning sounds a little harsh and gritty - perhaps fitting for the character of the piece, though. I still think you could’ve smoothed it over a bit with some reverb and equalizing out some of the treble tones. The progression is a little slow, but I did enjoy the melodic content that came in at around :45. The transition at 1:09 is a little rough. I liked the ominous tone at 1:09, but the texture is very minimalistic for most of the piece and often lacks a strong sense of direction. The eerie harmonies you introduce at 2:03 are cool, although after a while the structure of the piece is a bit stale, oscillating between 3 distinct sections (:45, 1:09, and 1:36) that in and of themselves aren’t varied too much. The piece definitely didn’t need to be almost 7 minutes long. I’d highly encourage you to look into using phrasing, dynamics, filtering, and other more diverse methods of creating variety in your tracks. Some new content finally arrives at 3:28, but the transition there was very sudden and the drums continue to sound dry. I did like the panning with the hi-hats, though, and I think the mix is cleaner because of it. As a priority, I’d focus on cleaning up your transitions and giving the piece more flow with the energy. Transitions like 4:21, 1:09, and 3:28 could work really well if you foreshadow the changes that are about to come. The latter ⅓ of the piece or so also doesn’t feature much melodic development compared to the first couple of times the melody appeared. The vocal samples are enjoyable, and they added a sense of conclusivity to this piece. Keep at it, ChristopherJohn!
Interesting bitcrushing on the drums, though it grows a bit tiring after a while without introducing enough variety to keep it interesting. It's a common mistake, however, especially in hip-hop tracks. I would say the most interesting part is after the third minute mark, arguably the most atmospheric section. It feels kinda dry afterwards, makes me wish for more. Aside from bringing a bit more variety next time, I would also suggest adding more layers in the background as a way to add depth to your soundscape, whether it's subtle ambiances or noises, crackles, anything. I think your style has potential, so have fun exploring possibilities!
Thanks for listening! I appreciate the constructive comments.
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