I agree with @GameBalance that the hats volume(s) needs to be lowered. Other than that, GG (I tried making a song like this before).
Tame the hats a bit really. And the melodical instruments, make them louder. The strings are fine loudness.
FINALLY someone giving me ACTUAL feedback.
Thank you! And I will take your words into account, and maybe release a new version, if I can.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.