woah, do i hear some panning there? damn.
anyway, i think the vocals at the start could use some reeverb/delay
there also could be some sidechain
the end could probably be a little better if there was a lowpass filter, y'know, just to make it fade out, instead of the volume thing.
there's probably more stuff to critique but i can't really wrap my head around it right now.
other than that, pretty nice song! sounds somewhat experimental, maybe just because its not the usual stuff that i listen to, but yeah, thats about it!