Could be better
1. Your style of strumming can be a little confusing, especially during the non-vocal bars. Make the strumming less complicated, or a bit more relaxed. I cannot stress this enough. Otherwise a lot of it will sound just like noise.
2. Your voice is pretty breathy, like you're trying to imitate a pop artist or something. Sing as naturally as possible; don't try to sound like you're whispering, it just detracts from the overall sound.
3. Perhaps another title?
Yeah, this is just a draft of the song. Just the basis of what it could sound like. My vocals in this song are not my best, it turns out in the very first recording of this song my guitar was out of tune, and my vocals were tuned with the guitar, so I couldn't get them to sound like what they did in the first recording, and the vocals in that one were good. I'm struggling to find new ways to sing this one but I'll eventually get there. As for the strumming and quality, I only recorded this with the mic built into my mac, and used garageband to put it together. That would explain why in some places it sounds bad, but thanks for the review and I'll get to work.