You got some great sounds in here. Love the intro too. I'd like to see some more progression on the melody, it just sounds like you've looped the same thing over through the whole track. Also I keep feeling like the song is going to pick up but there isn't anything that feels like a real change of tempo.
Send me a link once you've finished it, I'd like to hear what you did!
Thank you very much for this review - it will be really useful for me. I'll definitely send a full version of it as soon as I finish it.
P.S.: And sorry for my bad english, if I made some mistakes while writing this response :)