The instrumentals are nice - I particularly enjoy the lush layers of synths throughout the song. The melodic motifs, such as the one starting at around 0:12, are also nice. Both of these aspects combine to create this sort of melancholic atmosphere and vibe to it. Instrumentally, it's quite good and it works as a melodic expression of melancholy.
Lyrically and as a concept, the song isn't bad and I could see it working. However, as a whole, I have mixed feelings on the track, which for the most part can be attributed to the vocals. I understand that it's likely intentional, though for me personally, I felt like it was a bit grating to hear, especially considering the length of the song. This isn't to say that I don't think this sort of thing can be done well. I think the juxtaposition of this sort of vocal style with the more melancholic instrumental could definitely work in a goofy/comedic sense, but in this particular track, I personally don't think it does.
Regardless, the song is compositionally and conceptually interesting. Keep it up, and good luck on your future endeavors!
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