There are a lot of harsh frequencies in the mix at the beginning - I think you need to eliminate some of the treble tones on those synths. The balance with the percussion that comes in shortly thereafter is also a bit bizarre - I think the conga were a bit too quiet, especially when they first came in. The synths themselves are also a bit generic. By 1:10 or so, the texture has thickened. You have a good sense of harmony, although the kick sample had a bit too much treble as well IMO. The riff that is isolated at 2:13 needs to be varied a bit more - this piece has a dull sense of continuity after a while that demands some structural relief. You also didn’t vary the piece much in the latter half of the piece compared to the first half, and the first half has a greater emotional height than the second, which doesn’t help the sense of climax and resolve the piece has at the end. There also isn’t a lot of strong melodic content here, which makes it hard to stay engaged at times. The mix is clean, although it does have some frequency balance problems as I mentioned earlier. My main concern, however, is the rather bland composition. The piece has a great atmosphere, but I would’ve liked to see you use more phrasing and a stronger sense of progression and direction within that atmosphere. Fix that, and you’ve got a strong piece on your hands, my friend! Keep at it. ;)
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