I like the atmosphere at the beginning. The sub-bass was an interesting touch. The distorted chords at :38 distorted the bass riff a lot, though. I'd suggest some compression, stereo widening, and maybe even panning to help spread out the frequencies. The tonality of this piece is really cool. Sounds like it should be playing in the elevator of a shopping mall that only sells punk t-shirts. On the surface, it's smooth and fun, but definitely has some harsh frequencies and edgy riffs. It doesn't really feel complete yet, not in the least because of the sort of additive continuity of it, but I'm looking forward to hearing some of the other songs you have on this album. Keep it up, man! ;)