someplatypusguy I feel kind of bad giving this a low rating. But I have some criticisms.
The mix is pretty bad, definitely needs some EQ'ing, level balancing and side chaining. The kick and clap don't really come through the mix at all and the bass is incredibly muddy. Doing some of the things I said should help at least a bit.
The synths also sound pretty weak. Maybe simple EQ'ing and compression might fix it but I'd suggest spending more time on them.
I'd also recommend experimenting with panning more. Hi hats typically sound good panned to the left and try moving the synths around a bit. Keeping the bass and kick in the center always.
I also feel that there isn't much variety here and the song just kind of ends unexpectedly.
But if you put more work and time into it this could definitely get better.
It's all just about time, effort and experimenting. Keep going this definitely has potential.
GobSmacked 
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