The concept of the song is good. The execution is what lacks.
I think the lead synth could use some texture so it's not so, i don't know, grating?
You should also let more of the background instruments shine through sometimes. The best moments were around 0:17 and 0:24 when the lead stopped, and that glitched background synth provided a nice contrast. I think that kind of thing is lacking in the rest of the song, and it starts to sound somewhat bland as a result.
Imagine if you had a different instrument doing the lead melody from 0:00 to 0:13? I think that'd be the kind of contrast that would spice up this track.
Overall though, good concept and good effort.