The concept of the song is good. The execution is what lacks.
I think the lead synth could use some texture so it's not so, i don't know, grating?
You should also let more of the background instruments shine through sometimes. The best moments were around 0:17 and 0:24 when the lead stopped, and that glitched background synth provided a nice contrast. I think that kind of thing is lacking in the rest of the song, and it starts to sound somewhat bland as a result.
Imagine if you had a different instrument doing the lead melody from 0:00 to 0:13? I think that'd be the kind of contrast that would spice up this track.
Overall though, good concept and good effort.
Wow, yeah that's some really good points. Thanks! I totally agree with you. Probably could've used some more "question & answer" techniques in the melody as well.
I've been trying to work more on contrasts and using silences lately. So let's hope it's not as much of a problem in future tracks ;)
This is some 5/5 battle music. I could totally hear this in one of the original Pokemon games!
Haha, that's a fun response to it! An idea was to have this as a boss theme for the game it was made for. But, we didn't really have time to add a boss, so it ended up being used for the most hectic part in the game.
If you like reaction based retro-games you should check the game out. It's free to download, link in the description ;)