Cloudy stuff indeed. A really cute track I'd say! :) I like the instrumentation, it fits well, the intro is also very minimal, but works well with the mood.
You seem to be thinking in the right direction with your structure in the song, but it still needs work! It's good that you add stuff to make it more hectic. But I'm kinda missing that tension, release and change in intensity! The change between the first and second act is also a bit too abrupt, there isn't really anything that prepares you for it.
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Lastly, it would be nice with some movement in the sounds. I can especially hear it in the strings. Look into things like velocity, automation and if your strings got different modes of playing (like staccato, Fortpiano, Tremolo etc). Also LFOs if you want to get movement into
Other than that, good work, keep going! :3
Thank-you for taking the time out to give such a detailed & constructive response. I am genuinely taken aback! Really appreciate the suggestions, and you've given me food for thought to improve certain aspects. I'll check out the link etc!
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