very cool song
it has a ring to it that just lets me listen to it more
Nice for your first.
Hah, you're about at the skill level I was at when I started. :) (And that was no less than two weeks ago. Hah.) Well, let's look at your song.
It starts out nicely - there's a bit of an empty spot, though. I don't know what about it makes the song empty, it just is. I had this problem, too with my first songs. Hmmm.
Overall this song is relatively nice-sounding - good for your first. One problem with it is that empty spot in the beginning that comes right after the cymbal - you lose the rhythm and the buildup of the song - if you want to keep the listener's head bobbing, you don't want to do that. It's somewhat bland, though, in structure, melody, instruments, etc. You might want to work on your originality and consistency in the song.
The orchestral parts are nice, though half-baked - you also use the cymbal a little too much, in my opinion. Work on that. I suggest you remake this when you get better. It would be nice to see a remake of your first song after a lot of significant progress, right? :)
Well, hope I helped with this review. Work consistently and you'll get good at this.
Ah, while I'm at it... why don't you review some of my songs in your spare time? Especially look at Dark Storms at Sea and Project -Aster-. I'd appreciate it. :)
ty =D! Yeah, now going over it I wish I hadn't put that pause in there.. and the cymbals O_O yeah deffinately gonna remix this one
A great song. An incredibly good first song looking at how I have gone like 7 songs and am like 10 times worse than this. Very original too. Not just using the same old tricks like most songs on here.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.