It sounds too far off
First of all, all of the percussion needs to be set in the background and a better drum sequence in the foreground. The current percussion is not good for driving, but it would be a good complement to a much more clear drum part.
Other than that, I would set the stringed instrument a tad further back into the mix. Also, add a pad in the midsection to fill the gap that's there in the sound spectrum.
Aside from that, this piece sounds like it has the potential to sound great.
"Might be a bit fuzzy on the heavy drum parts if your using head phones and not quality speakers." by saying this you might as well say you suck at mixing. It sounds way overdriven and you need to work on that because it sounded like you may have had something good going here. Only thing other than that is the instrumentation. A few effects and use of an EQ would help you a lot.
Yeah, Only reason this was submitted without EQ is I had a limited time frame, FL DEMO, and a comp that likes to reboot on its own.
Also I dont know how to EQ or apply effects in FL demo since I cant get piano roll. Once I get the program, I'm pretty sure I'll remake this with better clarity, samples, and of course EQing.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.