Holy... This is actually beautiful. It portrays such a deep story accompanied with beatufiul sounds and wonderful composition. I would love to see you add some more orchestral instruments around this.
Please do Old Fish
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Young fish accidentally swims into a deep sea
Deep sea welcomes him ardently
And ask young fish to stay long
But this place is too heavy for a young fish
Young fish says to Deep sea : I’m leaving
Deep sea sadly watch him swim away
Although young fish is surround by deep sea , but there is nothing he can do
This place is so broad and alone
“Good bye” Says from deep sea
But young fish didn’t heard
So cold and heavy
Is this your heartbeat?
Whale feel bad for deep sea
So whale sings a song for him
So dark and pathetic
Whale's song make all these even worse
He knows
Even though this place is that wide
Young fish is never coming back
Maybe someday he will forget young fish
Maybe he just want young fish to look at him one last time
Veronina responds:
Thanks for listening! I made this song because i broke up with my ex so I think it's hard to have an Old fish one ...
I like the relaxed mood at the beginning. The reverb might’ve been a bit excessive, but the texture is beautiful. The piece develops a little slowly, but the melodic content is really strong. I wasn’t a huge fan of how the piano suddenly cuts out at 2:00 - I would’ve just let the reverb do the work there. Sounds a lot smoother that way. There’s another bit of a rough transition at 3:36. It can be hard to predict changes in the texture without drums, but it might help if you have at least some of the harmonic elements and instruments continue into the new sections. Usually I’m not a fan of instruments that are introduced for the first time very late in the piece, but I liked the cello part at 4:52 a lot. I’ll say it before and I’ll say it again - this piece is beautiful. One thing it doesn’t have a lot of is changes in energy level or dynamics, but I was nonetheless engaged throughout. Great work overall! NG needs more classical composers. :)
9.25/10
Veronina responds:
Thank you for these suggestion and listening! It means a lot , I really appreciate that, thank you , I'll think your comment carefully , thanks again!
Do another piece and have Young Fish grow into a huge fish and be very happy in the big sea. I love it.
Veronina responds:
Thanks, but i think it's hard to do 'cause my young fish just gone ...
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