Well, at least it's catchy.
Bit you've got a long way to go. During the drop, the drums have to really bang and the sub bass has to vibrate your head until diarrhea comes out of your nose. Speaking of the drums, sounds like default 808 drums, try grabbing some trap or trapstep samples.
My other complaint is that it's very repetitive. Not bad for an attempt, though.
Thanks JK! I will look into getting some samples sorted out in the next few days.