I feel like it has some potential - composition is ok-ish with enough sounds and variations, maybe add some closed hihat shimmer to fill the high frequencies a bit

mixing is listenable as well,

but the overall impression is kinda killed by the sound quality - at this point it sounds reeeally preset-y and unprocessed, e.g. that snare is super "cheap", maybe try to get some better sample pack one shots, or just layer stuff

keep learning stuff like compression, EQing, layering, and it will get better soon :)

cheers

I like this, I'll contact you if I want to use it in a game I'm working on.

i recommend to you use other samples than the fl studio default