Really great atmosphere, I feel like this would fit in a game like the new Mother 4 coming out soon, or something like that. I love the sliding strings too, creepy!
Niiice atmosphere. Really good writing. I like your chord choices, seems to be influenced by Radiohead a bit. The mixing while not professional shows great potential, you seem to have an ear for levels.
The drums stick out as a bit dry, but I'm not listening on the best speakers. Still, I'd suggest either making them a touch wet, or using compression on them to give them a bit of a fuller quality. Or some other technique if you have a preferred one.
The composition repeats a touch too much at the end, the last round of bars. If I were you I'd revisit the song and just write a unique outtro to it.
Nice job man! or woman! (But probably man.)
Melodies: I must say, you have your chord progressions down! You've got that mix of deep, dark, and upbeat! You're melodies are pretty complex, too! Well, melody... but we'll get onto that later.
Mixing: Sometimes it just seem the sub is a little loud, but it's ok. The piano is pretty nice, and everything else seems to fit in quite nicely.
PERSONALITY: This is something you struggled with. Although you added in a lot of beats and rhythms, the melosy stayed the same throughout. Maybe if it wasn't the same thing over and over again. But that's just me. And, if you changed some instruments, that would be nice too.
Nice job though! Keep working, and with yourr melodies, you'll be making good songs in no time.
Your songs should be more popular honestly, I'm glad there are forums here because it's hard to discover great artists. Your music reminds me of the early works of Amon Tobin but fused with classical music, which I love. This track is great, the sounds mix greatly and the music intensifies slowly and finishes of smooth.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.