Please take a single minute to look at the meters in your song before releasing these.
Why is it so quiet in the first part? Seriously, that's way too quiet for way too long. As for the melody, well, it's decent, but you really need to make those notes more staccato because they just slide and crash into each other. The drop is decent, but kind of random. You made that alarm clock go on too long. Sorry for all the pessimism, but these are just the things I noticed. The melody after that first drop took me by surprise since it didn't really fit in with the rest of the song. The best part of the song was the second drop. It was a major improvement over the first.
If I were to put the song's problems to any one source, I would say it's the lack of consistency. You really needed to improve the volume, and come up with a more consistent melody. It seems like you just made up some separate ideas and then tried to hook them together awkwardly during the production of the song. The best strategy is instead to focus on one central them and build off of it. Stay consistent!
For some reason, when you (as in one) exports a song from GarageBand, it becomes extremely quiet. As far as I know, one can't make it louder without downloading a ton of rubbish from the Mac App Store. This makes it very difficult, but I'm afraid we'll have to live with it. Thank you for you comment, it's very useful and I'll take your advice for my future songs!
It's like a combination from the british old-school dubstep with current modern brostep, I put you 4 stars.
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