Man, you've got some critics! But this track..ok, loop ;) is really cool. The beats give it a contemporary electro feel, as do the vocals very nicely stuttered in there. The vocal rolls along really well and goes together extremely effective with the high female voice kind of synth.
Its ominous and dark, and once again, if it appeared in a sci fi movie or any action movie really in an industrial, covert ops, biological manipulation (lol) context it would fit like a glove.
But not good either.
The instruments all stepped on one another. It doesn't seem like you put an awful lot of thought into it. Though the pad was kinda cool and added to the dark-theme you were aiming for.
Keep at it, you can only get better :)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.