it's repettitive and a bit hard on the ears, but other than that it's fine
Yeah, it's fairly repetitive, I won't deny that. I do enjoy repetition, and I did try to add cool things to the song to make it a little less dull. But, under the circumstances, I think it turned out fine.
Judging by the circumstances, quite good. Some samples raped my ears a little.
Thanks for you feedback.
Learn this... never, ever play bum out of tune in your intro. I'm off to rinse my ears out.... :(
This seems cliche, but you really don't understand as much about music as you seem to think you do. If you did, you'd understand what this song is trying to do, the emotion it's trying to convey. Although, really, every musician reaches a point where he/she wants to compose music off-key and make it sound listenable to them, and every music-lover who keeps an open-mind wants to hear slightly abrasive and off-key music at some point. See Keiji Haino, Whitehouse and Merzbow for a few examples of people who have found success with music that attempted something similar to this, obviously with a different intent.
I feel as though mentioning that I am a student made you feel the need to give me advice. That's the explanation that I came up with for your "learn this" comment. Really, that doesn't make you sound intelligent, or that you're even qualified to give advice, when it's attached to a short and generic comment such as the one you made.
Really, "play on key" is such a boring piece of advice that is given by people who know little about music, almost as useful as "use a drill to tighten screws" is to a contractor.
All that being said, the Merzbow and Keiji references weren't pointless. The song itself is based on Asian music, based in fourths unlike western music. The low notes exist to add a sense of tension to the piece, while the brass in the intro and outro is precisely meant to make the listener feel uncomfortable, so it succeeded I suppose if you had such a bad reaction to it. The idea is that, in a movie let's say, how would you express how unsettled a potential murder victim would be knowing that a killer is in the house with her? With a song like this, which makes you feel unsettled. It's kind of Zappa-Esque in that regard.
Anyways, I have a song called Pretty Butterflies which was composed in G-Major and I hate it. This song is more to my tastes. To each their own I suppose. Although, this song has been downloaded a couple times, so I guess someone liked it. I look forward to your comment criticizing my long reply to your comment.
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