Hello! So, full disclosure: I can be a bit dry and blunt in my reviewing on occasion. I don't have any ill will or anything towards you and I'm not trying to be mean, just trying to be straightforward about how I scored things. :) Oh, also, the "not-so-good" list will be far larger in volume of writing at minimum, just because I have more things to say about things that can be improved, such as how and why.
-Really nice arpeggios in the background!
-You have a really neat kick and good percussion in the beginning - it's quite fitting and does very well. Pretty rockin' bassline too.
-Very nice background fx in the breakdown at 2:40 and especially more towards 3:30-4:00.
-Excellent transition back into the melody at 4:00. I like the background pads, though I wish they were a bit more present rather than pushed back so far in the mix.
-Beautiful section at 5:10. Those plucked chords are fantastic.
-Points for bitcrushed ending.
-Excellent general composition structure all around - it has good buildups, good places to breakdown, and doesn't overstay its welcome in any particular section. This is a surprisingly difficult thing to get right, so great job here!
-The initial sound wash right at the start sounds a bit like it's clipping - could use a bit better of mastering there.
-The chopped-up vocals are cool, but they need to be de-essed or have some reining in of the high frequencies. The hissing gets a bit too loud (though I know it can be a bit hard to balance a good hissing sound with the volume).
-The distorted sound at around 0:30 is neat, but somewhat painful. This is largely due to the ringing reverb. I'd suggest turning up the diffusion so that it's less like a delay, at the very least. I might also suggest a different distorted instrument doing octave jumps instead.
-About 1:05, it really didn't need to take out the arpeggios. I think that you could have developed them a little bit more, as they fill out the lower mid end of the mix. Similarly, at this point, the mids where the distorted sound mentioned before... well, they're full. The distorted sound doesn't work very well there.
-About 1:50 is where the flaws in the percussion start showing - your kick and hats are fine, it's mainly your snares that are pretty poor in my opinion.
-Your synths also start showing their basic and lower-quality origins around 1:50. This is generally ok, but in such a fleshed-out song as this, I generally try to have a good mix of a few things: Have some simpler sounds for your basic bass and leads, but have some more complex ones for backgrounds. At the very least, let them vary a little bit more in their basic forms.
-2:40 could use a bit more than the pumping bassline in my opinion - it stays bare just a bit too long. Interestingly enough, it's also too short of a breakdown. The breakdown at 3:30 is far better, though the bassline issue comes back VERY strongly.
-I think johnfn would back me up on this one - your melody is pretty... aimless. Often it feels like it isn't going anywhere in particular, but that the notes are strung together and called a melody. Melodies need some kind of direction that they're working towards.
-Not-points for very repetitive ending.
THE RESULT: 6/10
This is honestly a pretty damn good song, all things considered. It has all of the basic elements down, but mainly fails in terms of sound quality, levelling, and some more specific compositional tweaks.