fiya! if only you had a copy of your verse in the description. otherwise i feel that you really improved dude, one of the main and prolly most impressive change up was the pitch of your voice. now im not sure if you kept a higher pitch (with many high frequencies that sometimes pierced the ears) because you had to due to mic quality or because of the room you had to record in, but it definitely makes it easier on the ears, to tolerate and actually understand the words you are saying. a much better deliver.
i will be honest with you and only honest. the verse that you wrote, overall seemed rather mediocre to me compared to the meaning power that you are usually able to express. it seemed to me that you were trying to try to write a verse, as if there was some mental constipation and you just had to force that good shit out. and you did pop it out dude, congrats on that! but i think that you could've done even better if maybe you took the time and effort. maybe the time and effort was so overwhelming and you put so much focus on trying to bow down to the particular topic, instead of expanding on it. but its all part of the learning process dude. one quality i really like about you is how you never give up and just do your own thing. i especially like the detail you may have added at the beginning of your verse with the soda pop snap sound effect hehe, like alert alert suga flows incoming! lol.
it was a good verse, i would say a decent verse, but to me, i feel that you have so much more potential. maybe you just need to relax and take a break? explore life and have funzikins and fart.
i get the feeling that you are better at freestyling than at sitting down and writing raps. lol, sometimes these things shift as we grow. its beginning to shift, on this side, for me. i find that i would rather freestyle than write, but when i reunite with that awesome power, i hit ya with the passion.
its so funny dude, ive got my album in the works (i just need to rewrite a verse or two then record that shiznits) but in one of my tracks i say "outta sight outta mind" at the end hehe, im not gonna change it anytime but just wanted to say that. cause you know the cliche: great minds think alike. you are not alone, though many times we must feel that way to excel in our category.
because stars shine most brightest at night. so whenever you are feeling lost and lonely never give in to total despair and devastation. simple steps.
peace thru pieces.
also Madwigged was dope too, but i would say that to better pronounce your words when doing the fast flow, or people will not understand anything you are saying lol. i can see you put a lot of work into your material, and that i give props too. keep at it!
Q ~~
Madwigged 
