Really nice, really interesting piece. The obscured vocals and the erratic rhythms combined to make a wonderfully hazy and unique atmosphere, which in my mind struck a perfect balance--it sounded neither rigidly controlled nor sloppy. The sounds you chose were all really well-suited and tasteful--I particularly enjoyed the drums (there were some seriously complex beats hiding here!) and the bass that came in at 2:13.
The fact the piece was almost entirely consonant made the occasional "off" note seem very jarring (for example, in the little cluster at 0:14, or the grace note at 1:50). This didn't happen a lot, but it really stuck out when it did. I think the piece might have been better either if you had removed the dissonances entirely, or if you had included more of them to make it seem less unusual.
However, I don't have any more criticism to give. This was just a really pleasant, slightly off-kilter piece. Good work!
I will be one of the judges reviewing your entry to the NGAUC!!
First off I have to say That I love your style!!
I loved the chords you had going on in the intro, very great compositional style!! great jazzy chords and awesome little bends. Youre transitions were really really great (excuse my lack of proper diction to avoid usuing "realy" over and over) but i truly loved it.
The style of the drums you have going on were amazing, so smooth. It sounds like you had a professional drummer drumming just for you. So tasteful, so smooth, so jazzy. (I may be a bit biased, I'm a drummer myself) And I'm honestly curious how you did it. The wholesong just has this laggy little jazzy relaxed vibe to it. each transition was amazing, every thing flowed.
That all being said. I could never understand what the vocals were saying, there was always too much going on with the vocals, and way too much reverb on them. That would be something to definitely work on!
I wish you the best in the competition!!!
Hi trunotfals, thanks so much for the kind words! I noticed the reverb the morning after (was cramming work in til early hours of the morning), it's definitely something i'll note for future reference. I really appreciate your comments and I'll do my best as the competition continues!
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