=== This is an NGAUC Audition Round Review ===
My god. You, my friend, have a way with your trills. I just love trilled melodies and you pretty much hit it out of the park. Your melodies all have a fantastic sense of rhythm to them that I usually don't hear from musicians twice as experienced as you! So really good job on that. Both your melodies and rhythms are good. What is not so good is your sound design. In general, I hate to admit it, but the sound design honestly leaves a lot to be desired, and makes your song sound a little amateur. I'd encourage you to check out chiptune, partially because I'm biased as a chiptune composer, but also because I think your melodic style would really tend to it well. In any case, neat stuff! Keep at it.
Mini-scores (See http://johnfn.newgrounds.com/news/post/936953 for what this means and how to improve)
Overall (this is not an average): 6.5/10
First off, the intro is nice, and the melodies in it work well together. At 0:26 the instruments aren't mixed together very well (The new instrument is too loud and sounds simple). I like some of the "record scratch" sound effects, they fit the song well. The transitions aren't bad but they could definitely be better. Most of the melodies in the song are OK but the outro isn't very well executed. It had potential but it stretched on too long and the really quiet low pitched instrument didn't feel like it fit in. With a few changes and a new outro this could be a great song, keep up the good work! =D
Thank you for the tips and your really thorough analysis of my song. I totally agree with what you said. This was very helpful and I will attempt to correct it right away!
You sir, have a talent ;)
Wow, thank you so much! I have only recently started making music, so it is really great to have a nice comment on my song!