You major problem is the kick drum, it's so dead. It really hurts the theme of the song with its Fruity-ness (cough cough, add FX to the Fruity Loop sample). Also, add some more percussion stuff to it. A driving percussion force is missing and it hurts the song. The synth composition is great, but where's the rest of the show? Get some better samples, google "Breakbeat-Paradise", got some tight drum samples, and add FX, using the mixer, to the bass drum. YES, it can be more bassy : D
-Good try : D
Check my audio!
Thanks for the advice, but I made this song in about an hour. I forgot about the other drums :P