Good stuff on the progression and the choirs.
What I don't like: the drums (they don't fit with the cinematic part of the song). Also they're probably too loud compared to other instruments. The second part of the song (after 1:40 circa) is "bad" considered what came before that. Maybe the drums makes me feel that way, because the voice is cool and all, the piano could have a better melody, it's "just there" if you get what I mean. If it's meant to be a background thing then I'd lower its volume and make the voice stand out a little bit more.
Oh another thing, the brass instrument at 1:05 I don't know but I can't help feeling that it's kinda out of place. Don't ask me why I don't know how to answer.
Overall you started good, then the song gradually loses interest. I'd have added some low strings in the second part, lots of the spectrum is missing.
This is all IMHO of course!
-- if I find another nice song I like I'm gonna scout --
I understand and thank you for giving your time to listen to it, I'll try to work on it some more. also thanks for what can be changed, if I spent more time on it, it could've been better.