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(the following is just an opinion by some dude)
The melody sounded good. When it came it and the drum 'beat' cut out it sounded very relaxing. The sounds were perfect for that. Congrats...
Lets be honest here. How lond did you spend on this??? Maybe about an hour or 2? Cause thats kinda what it sounds like.
The intro, (no offense) sucked, horrably... It was like, 10 measures long. Just a little TOO long for a drum pattern that adds a 'new' sound every 2-4 measures. Let it kinda start with a melody. Then add the drum beat.
Try to spend some time on your stuff plz.
Thx for reading this long review!
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