It could use a little more melodic and harmonic cohesion, especially at the beginning. It just sounded all over the place and I was confused as to the direction it would take. What I mean by that is, synthetically, you should have sounds that match each other a little better. That would help with the basic theme that you're trying to construct here.
Though, as a result, you've achieved something is very, very experimental. So I'll throw everything out the window and base it upon that: an interesting choice of sounds.
- Drop could be a little bigger, but it's fine for what it is.
- I'm definitely diggin' that bassline at :32. It's deep and got a cool slide to it.
- The bells don't really fit in this section and you probably could've done without it.
- The main saw lead is alright. Could have a little more texture to it.
- 1:20, when all the bassy sounds come together... there needs to be more separation. A lot of this is in the mid-mid/low range. Some could be pitched a little higher.
- Build-ups need to be more exciting and appealing. Layering would definitely help you out here.
- The kit is lacking. It doesn't really push through beyond all the synthetic noises you've got going on. Some percussion can be heard, but I had to turn it up to discern the kick, snare, and the rimshot. It wasn't until the break happened at 1:01 that it was fairly present.
- There isn't much in the way of stereo separation. It's just all in the middle (well, not all of it, but most of it). Some elements could be panned to make room for others.
- For all of this though, the mix is fine. There's just better leveling that needs to be done.
Like I said... not bad. I can dig it.
Thank you so much for your feedback! I totally agree with the stuff your saying, I am making a new song right now that I think is a lot better and more organized. I use Reason, and I am learning new things every day. Anyway, thanks a bunch, you seem like you really know what you're doing! Love your songs, too! (By the way, I am trying to get scouted, so if you don't mind, I would really appreciate it.)
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