The vocals are nice, but the instrumental doesn't really feel hip-hop to me at all. It's almost totally out of sync with the acapella at 2:30. I can easily pick out the piano preset -- lot of amateur mistakes going on here that need cleared up. Maybe I'm missing the point.
I'm glad someone really tried to "look" over my work and see if I'm capturing the right vibe. I have been needing someone to really help me find a sound and stick to it.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.