Uh...this is more of a sample to be honest. There's no real kick, no huge bass drops, and honestly...it's got more of a cinematic feel to it.
I'd go over it with your friend again and mess around with some other free samples that are out there to get the desired effect.
Sorry for the 0 bomb...but, a LOT of improvement can be made with this piece.
Cool I get it but I'm a scrub at music so Grayson will have to fix it