Well, I really like this song, except the melody that comes in at 0:33. You maybe should not have made that part, but some chords would be nice. But well done for one of your first songs. BTW, sorry for bad English!
The English wasn't that bad, I understood everything.
Even though there actually were chords, they were probably just too quiet.
But yeah, thanks for the review.
It has a good start, but at 33 seconds in, it really kills the melody, it doesn't fit with the melody really. It sounds off key. It would be cool if it followed the melody, then you'd have a more solid track here, but when the durms and lead synth just drop out, and randomly come back in, that also kind of bothers me. This song could use more structure, and more with the bass note wise, but not a bad start since your'e new to this. Good first attempt!
Thanks alot man! I now finally found the problem with the melody, guess it was creators blindness or however you wanna call it. And, yeah, the structure thing... You're absolutely right. This song really needed more of that.
Also you're like one of my favourite musicians ever so you have no idea how great this review felt.
The instrumentation here is quite sparse, but there are good bits. I like the sort of crackly bass that starts the piece, and I think it combines well with the repeating triangle-wave phrase that runs throughout. I'm not sure about the melody that starts at 0:33: harmonically, it doesn't seem to fit in with the underlying arpeggio, although with a bit of tweaking it could fit together in a very interesting way. Good use of the various sound options provided by chiptunes, even if the composition was a bit limited.
Thanks for the review! And, yes, I do agree actually. Even though I don't really see the problem with the Melody, it sounds alright for me. About the composition: I am still very, very new at this, even though this obviously doesn't save me from criticism, and yours was fair, but, to be honest, I just ran out of ideas for this song.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.