0:08 Wow that drum loop...
0:14 The bass loop seems a bit random. not sure if i like it.
0:22 it drives along interestingly, though
0:28 i don't like the open hi-hat it's too piercing and random in the mix
0:37 you got unnecessary distortion here
0:45 but a lot of very good melodic components
0:52 i wish the drums would stand out more, and the kick drum weren't so muddy
1:01 interesting progression. at least there's some kind of grime to the beat here
1:11 the randomness of the riff is not very appealing
1:17 ok sometimes it hits, and it feels good
1:23 other times, it doesn't... i like the slow strings here
1:30 the plucks would be nice if they didn't distort terribly

Overall it's quite a static piece and it does have that factory flavour, however i would've like a little bit less distortion and less muddy mixing on the kick drum. it does have a nice progression, but certain points feel largely underwhelming. a bit of improvement could be made on this.

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