That guy doesn't know what he's talking about. This fits abstract art perfectly.
I vote blam, I'm sorry sir but the first reason I say this is the track is meant to be ambient, and it doesn't sound ambient, it has ambient sounds yes, but that doesn't make in an ambient track. It sounds very flat to me so there is a huge chunk there. Not to mention it sounds like most of the sounds are not working together, but just trying to fill the space. Track is so long without much variation. From what I can hear anyways. Its hard to hear the song in general.
Did you just slap some random samples together in audacity? That's what it sounds like.
I'm sorry for the tough love but it will teach you more in the end.
I hope my review helps and if you want tips or anything PM me.