Need some work
Well this song has a quite nice melody but I think it could have been better with some smooth changes:
- I think you should find a better choir sample for your work. This one is easily to hear that it's not real. But if you don't have time to look around here's a suggestion: increas the attack on the choir and make slower melody for the choir. The choir will flow in slower and it'll bring a more realistic feel.
- As I mentioned above this song would be better with a slower choir melody. I'm not saying that this isn't good, but I don't feel it sad.
- The same thing goes to the strings as for the choir. Slower melody with more attack on the string-samples.
These are my suggestion for improving this song. Otherwise I can say that the piano and the bells were ok. The song was a bit repetitive but you've variated enough the instruments and the structure that I couldn't feel it so. The melody was also ok.
Not a bad work I think. With some practice it could be much better I think - so keep it up!
hmmm, such a bittersweet melody. The choir was quite repetitive, but I was able to find a deep hurting in it, the bells complimented that image well. I keep thinking of a burning town, the camera angled up towards a burning chapel, everything in slow motion as things collapse, explode, and slowly return to the earth from once it came.
The piano is as mentioned earlier the saddest part of the song.
Oboe, I feel an oboe would add a great many levels of sadness to it! But those bells, did the job just perfectly in my eyes. You see I am a huge bells and strings fan, so I find a great many volumes of stories from the two.
I would like to invite you to check out some of my work sometime, you remind me of some of my earlier works, it brings back some good memories. Thank you for that.
Keep them coming Arkiln, I really hear some potential in your works.
The choir is not what I call sad. The piano is sad, but the choir needs work. Do you have any better samples? The song itself is really good. I congratulate you on that.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.