Percussion is poorly suited to the rest of the track, not soundwise but mixing wise, its stereo placement is so jarring to the spatial feel of the other instruments you'd have been better off just muting it or starting your mix from scratch. The percussion is also too repetitive, do some fills(not rock-type bang bang crash snap, it's ethnic) Maybe some rolls here and there, some polyrhythms. The mix is too quiet, way too quiet, I give a leeway of 15-3 RMS in my tracks, peaking at 0, this is way below that. I'm all for 'preserve the art' when it comes to keeping your sound uncrushed and maintaining some sexy dynamic range, but there's no point in just yanking down the gain if you never touch 0. All that said, it's got feeling, and you're doing good, keep it up.

The problem with how its levels is that the volume needs to be turned up all the way to hear this. You need to take your final MP3 and put it back in your program and master it to be louder so the next song I listen to doesnt hurt my ears

I dig the progressive ambiance, the way that the song flows through the orchestral is solid, and the song feels like the story you are portraying. It does end a little abruptly, but this is a minor factor as you can always change it, if you wanted! Releasing a song on hear does not mean it is a journey not worth retracing :D Solid style, and good use of instruments. Maybe mess around with slight effects and sound mixing a little more and boom! Although, I am not sure how open East West Symphonic Orchestra is!

On a second note, the song sounds good in loop. I just think it ended a little suddenly! Good song!