This is the best. It oozes character, charm and style. Play it in the shower, play it in the toilet, play it in your lounge room, play it on the train, play it at school, play it while eating fish and chips with one hand while fighting off Mr Williams with the other. What an inspiration.
You made a very nice little piece here! I really like the overall composition and the "vibe" you're trying to portray with it.
My personal suggestion would be to expand the song a little bit, so it follows traditional musical form a bit more. Right now, the song structure is as follows: (Intro -) A - B - B. You could expand on the theme by using an A - A - B - A or A - A - B - B form instead. Of course, this is down to personal taste, but I personally think it would allow you to express the first theme a bit more :)
Mix-wise, I think some small tweaking here and there could further improve the overall mix. Saw-waves tend to sound a bit harsh, and this song is no exception, especially since you've formed your bass-line with them. They also sound a bit boomy. Some additional EQ can help to reduce ear-fatigue in this case. In addition, although reverb is nice, too much of it can create a muddy mix. Using a delay would've given you a much cleaner result!
All in all, though, I really like it! Keep up the good work! 4/5
Hey thanks for the feedback! I know it's a really late response, but I appreciate the advice you've given here. Only 2 years later is this really making sense to me now and I agree with the things you've pointed out. Will probably be reworking the track soon. Thanks again :)
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