Interesting atmosphere here you got here. I think it needed a bit more spaciness, though, which you could've accomplished with some reverb. The snare was a bit dry, and the distorted vocals could've sounded more ominous and cool if they were smoothed out with some reverb. You have a cool mood with the blissful synths and vocals, though. I think you might've needed a smoother transition into 2:11. Even a crash probably would've sufficed. I also thought the snare was a a bit too loud. Again, dialing back the volume but increasing the reverb would've really helped give this piece a nice, flowy and smooth vibe. I admire your sense of harmony and progression, though. There's another sudden transition at 4:14. After around 4:30 it also becomes obvious that the vocal sample clip comes in and cuts off rather suddenly, which probably could've been fixed with some more careful editing techniques. Also, this piece lacks conclusiveness IMO, ending on a rather ambiguous, clashing chord instead of any tonic I could discern. It's really unique and engaging work, though, so I'd encourage you to keep working on this! About the "chipstep" NG genre: I'm pretty sure it's generally used for miscellaneous electronic music. XD Keep at it, SleepFacingWest! ;D
Thanks! I wasn't super happy with this one in general. It was supposed to be on a new album I'm working on, but I cut it out. I'll give your suggestions a try. Hopefully they'll help me like it a bit better.
Thanks for your thoughtful response. As always, you give me good things to work on.
The claps are way over the main mix which makes it kinda hard to concentrate on what going beyond that. It's a really nice mellow composition idea you got there, although repeatable it keeps you interested. The melodies are a bit too ambient for my taste but i can see you got the potential to make nice tracks. So my proposition would be to experiment a bit more with your beat sounds to help your tracks come forward. Very interesting ideas tho.
Hmm, I'm not sure about this song lol. It didn't sound very appealing until like 1:36. The percussion was kinda rough and "in your face", but other than that, this was a pretty interesting song!
You should post the lyrics in the description though. I can't understand any of it!
The percussion is part of the ham-fistedness. The lyrics are the other part. I typically like more layers in meaning, but I couldn't make this one go. Regardless:
Hello my friend
It's me again
Home is where you are
Lay down the public mask
Tug the strings of my heart
Spark the powder cask
Detonate the space
Where the haustorium grow
Sweetgrass cedar and sage
Let all the villains go
Put the headphones on again
Play my favorite song
Turn the world off with a switch
This is where I belong
Despite the ways I try
I'll never be the one
To understand goodbyes
When we were still having fun
Listen to your bliss
The sound will take you home
Vibrating bits of air
This is the world I know
I guess this is goodbye
We stopped before we left the ground
You'll never be my fondest heartache
'Cause between the two of you I choose sound