I like the dark pads and nature FX at the beginning. It has this really apprehensive, yet also relaxed mood about it. I think you went a little overboard on the white noise effects, but the mood here is great. I wish it progressed a little faster, though. You left yourself a lot of space for contrast and climax that you didn't really capitalize on that well. I know it's supposed to be very laid-back, easy listening, but I wish there was more engaging and melodic content here. It's extremely long for having such little melodic content. Still, for what it is it's not a bad first track at all. The white noise is still the main thing that bothers me. I think you need to both a) equalize it so it's less prominent in the mix and b) add more creative effects to it to make it more interesting. Right now, it sort of just steals the show from what few notes you actually have in there, like at 4:37 for example. I really like the title here, though, and I think you've shown some potential with this track. Tell you what: if you upload another track here that displays a broader skill set, PM me and I'll scout you. Good luck, man! ;)
Thanks alot my friend! I really enjoyed reding your opinion, just keep in mind that this is not a finished song :P
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