For the song itself, I'd give three stars. And for the message of the song, I'll make it four.
I think the song style/rhythm has been used a lot in the past, and it doesn't seem to do much to make itself unique from that. So I wasn't very impressed by that.
But I was impressed by the message delivered by the lyrics. Though, knowing music these days, I suspect that there aren't many that actually listen to lyrics.
If you need some help with choosing good lyrics, please send me a PM. I might have a knack for advising you on that. x)
Thank man, gotta love the comprehensive reviews! Yes it definitely doesn't get any points for originality, I just have a soft spot for that Enema of the State kind of sound, so I thought I'd do what I could to try and create it myself. The drum rhythm was basically a copy and paste kind of deal to an extent, a lot of the beats were the same..-ish.
The lyrics were actually the same way, they weren't really meant to be deep or meaningful, I just wanted to fill the space with some good ol' late 90s pop punk vocal harmony. If the lyrics have a personal meaning to you, that's just a bonus for me. Haha. Rock on, brother!
this reminds me of Blink 182's first album...damn I'm old lol good stuff tho!
Thanks man! That's exactly the sound I was going for. Maybe not their earliest stuff but Enema or TOYPAJ, or somewhere in between.
Definitely not my style of music, but I'll give it a shot.
Honestly, the instrumentation is superior to most of the tripe I hear on the radio these days. If that's where you're headed, I'd say you definitely have the chops to do so, and not be one of those forgettable producers.
It is as has been said already, the lyrics need work. It almost works, but they do sound too similar to other songs, and the words themselves are inconsistent in tone.
For example, the first line 'I am the light which seeks to illuminate the sickness infecting our reprabates' is incredibly flowery, while the line 'There's more to life, don't waste your designation' is a bit too blunt by comparison. I know personally how hard it can be to write good lyrics, and I suppose the only thing I can say is keep trying.
You've got a good rhythm and a solid foundation. Where you go from here will define your future as a musician. I wish the best for you.
Thank you so much for the comprehensive review. I agree, I am definitely not a lyricist.. It's been a thorn in my side for years haha. Thank you for the compliments on the instrumentation, this is definitely not a 'studio' set up that's for sure. The microphone just came with my sound card. I also need to get a real bass if I want to sound as authentic as I can. I don't plan on getting real drums anytime soon though.
Holy pop punk kid. haha. Pretty awesome, man. Lyrics, totally ridiculous.. haha, but work so well. Nice man. Nice.
Haha yeah the lyrics are definitely the weakest point, but when did pop punk lyrics ever matter anyway? Thanks man, much love!
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