Nice start : )
Your getting there, but you've got to push it hard, and I mean HARD to get this any better. The mixing of the main synths sucks butt, the mixing itself just sucks, get that down PRONTO!!! Nice composition though : )
Keep working at it with all your heart man!
Well, like i said, this is the first version, that is gonna be finnished bout time to christmas :) as a christmas-special...