Needs more crap
you need more stuff going on, that kick would sound good with a nice melody, it sounds like when i turn off all of the instruments on my songs so that i can listen to the beat.
Try making the melody less random, you should try the vanguard vst or something. I haven't bought it yet, but when i do my songs will sound awesome, that same melody would sound good with a nice vst
... Random is good, the more random the better you don't get stuck with it in your head, and if its stuck in your head you get annoyed with the song.
Did you know this song reminds me of Rianaha SOS. Yet this seriosly is way better, as you can HEAR THE MUSIC.
Well this is most interesting. Keep it up, and don't forget to check out my stuff! ;D
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.