Thoughts while listening:

15 seconds is a loooong time to wait for the song to start. Can't say I'm a big fan of the faux guitar sound...the highs are a bit too ear-stabby. Anyways...compositionally - decent chord progression, some nice change-ups at about 1:40. I know how finicky that can be to mix in. I'm kinda wanting some more instrumentation here. Can't hear any bass. Nice bridge at 2:50. And a 15 second silent outro. Perhaps my speakers are missing something, being labtec computer speakers that came with the Dell I'm currently using...

Thoughts after listening:

Some improvements;

-Needs a more complete instrumentation. You've completely filled the highs, but I'm hearing almost nothing in the lows and low-mids.
-Mix is a bit off. You have to bring out your pads a bit more to make sure they're providing the soundscape you need for your chord progression.
-Where's the lead line? At this point, what you have is a drummer and a rhythm guitar and a pad. Bands are put together the way they are for a reason - everything you have here is great, but you gotta use it to support a melody! I want a singer or lead guitar or something! What you've got is a backtrack. It's a start.

Some good points;

-Chord progression is good. Catchy overall, certainly something I'd like to solo over.
-Beat is solid, nicely put together, simple...but that's not a bad thing.
-Loved the changups. You can certainly mess with it a bit more, but at present, it's workable.

Overall, I see this as a start, not a finished product. Doesn't mean you should give up on it, but if you wanna make this really pop, it requires more work, IMHO.

3/5

-Ceevro

Damn this is really awesome!Excellent work,mate!

Wow that was loud! Great build up, this must be my favorite music of yours now :D

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