Good, but I have a few comments. The solo violin sound is a bit too harsh for me and is very hollow sounding. Its not pleasant at all on the ears, maybe try a marcato sound instead. I also think the entrance of the violin at around 1:09 seems a little off. Besides those few little negatives you got good work here. The cello sounds pretty decent and when the other strings that enter sound good as well. Overall good job.
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So I've been working on this piece a little bit. It started out as a horror theme sort of thing, but quickly evolved into.. whatever this is xD
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lantaren responds:
I was going for a very hallow violin sound, harsh was pretty much the intended effect. Supposed to sound like the violin is being played very forcefully I agree that 1:09 is a bit strange, but it made the most sense out of any transition into the next phrase.
This is a very eerie and well written track with a lot of potential.
Composition wise, it has some really interesting components. To me it sounds like a horror theme from the more difficult level of a RPG with the development behind its repeating melody. All parts seem to suit this well, from the first sections brash staccato strings and eerie celeste*, to the second sections overpowering percussion and manic synth lines, these elements definitely add tension and maintain a high until the end.
But, while at the base you have the components of an eerie track, I believe there are some subtleties that are missed through the mix (which also contribute on the composition side of things) that would keep it from sounding more professional. It seems as though you've decided to add elements solely on 4 bar repeats which to me isn't building an gradual ramped and uncertain atmosphere, as it is stacking blocks on top of each other until it gets to its peak. In the introduction it would be especially effective if you were to have subtle instruments and atmospheres creeping in and out, this would leave me as the listener uncertain of where its going, which is definitely what you want if you're trying to make people pee their pants.
I'm sorry if I've been a bit cruel there. What I'm pointing out is definitely something I struggle with as well as its one of the hardest things to tackle when producing a track, but if you manage to add the right subtleties into places that would build the track in a way that the average listener would not consciously realise, then you can make the repetitive elements constantly develop in unexpected ways and really hold a persons. I think there's nothing wrong with the instruments you've used here, its just the atmosphere behind them I think is missing and thats definitely something that can be added in and developed if you want to do that
Great job anyway, man! I did enjoy this track. :)
*correct me if this isn't a celeste, I'm not sure here
lantaren responds:
First of all, thank you for taking the time to review this!
Yes, it is 4 bar blocks stacked on top of eachother for the most part - although the rhythmic patern is 7/4 and then 9/4 (which is more like 2/2 - 3/4 then 2/2 - 5/4 in terms of feel), and I was hopijg the modulation would be adequate enough on top of the somewhat complex polyrhythmic stuff I had going on.
Not a celeste - It's actually a really cool 'victorian music box' kontakt instrument that was for free download (you can google that if you want) on ambient setting. Probably the coolest little instrument I have in my library, despite being so simple.
I agree that adding things on a less linear way would be better, this is in pretty rough shape, only a couple of hours and no real afterword reflection like I usually will do.
nice, very enticing
lantaren responds:
Thank you!
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