As Arsonist said, there's a lot of potential in this, and I could immediately hear that you have a lot of talent for this kind of music. There's a few things you can tweak a bit to make this sound even better:
First of all, the hats. Cut the low end of your hats in an equalizer to remove that annoying "cheap" noise. For EDM music like this you usually only use the higher frequencies of the hats. In adition to cutting some low end, you should also cut your higher frequencies so that the hat's doesn't sound to sharp on cheap speakers and cheap headphones. I would cut everything below 2000hz at least, and everything above 17000hz. The eq'ing in a track makes or break it in my opinion, so I would really advise you to look a bit further into it.
Another advise is that the high pitched saw lead you use after the 1 minute mark is a bit to sharp, and painful to the ears. My headphones are fairly neutral when it comes to frequencies, but in small and cheap speakers (like laptop speakers) the high end in the track usually get's boosted, making the sharp synths sound even sharper and very unpleasant to the ear.
Again, you could solve this solve this problem, but you can also just put a highpass filter on the mixing channel to remove some of the highest frequencies. Highpass filtering is a good way to get rid of high and unpleasant frequencies.
Except from the eq'ing though. this track was great :). Really liked the idea of it, and it has a really nice "dancey" feel to it :). Good choice of the synths. (Maybe add a heavier subbass to really reward the ones with bass heavy speakers :)?)
Great job :).
Keep up the good work :D.
-Ectisity
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