The rythm part sounds good, maybe even great. Unfortunately, there's a very important melody in there that you missed. Without that, it just doesn't have any feeling.
What can I say? Just plain beautiful!
Let me start off by saying that this is the first game remix I've heard off of this site.
Let me just say that the music is really beautiful, and I think you should submit it to ocremix.org.
Thanks for making my first time such an enjoyable experience, I think that I'll keep its calming melodies on repeat as I lay myself down towards unconciousness for the night.
I'll make sure to listen to more of yours stuff when I can.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.