I really really liked the percussional works here. I felt it was a little unrefined, but that percussional beat shows great promise. The melody was a tad repetitive, but it has a great dark ambiant atmosphere, and the song loops excellently.
Use the compresser effect to keep your song from distorting. If the bars up top start flashing red, then that means your volumes are too high. press f9 to bring up the mixer window, and create the Fruity Compresser effect in one of the boxes.
The Slayer guitar was too overpowering, using it at a lower level will make it more appealing, as well as let that harp like sound more pleasent, since you wouldn't have to strain to hear it.
Still good effort, keep them coming, you'll get there if you keep creating. I'd like you to check out some of my stuff sometime ^^.
Thanks for the review and especially for the advice. I wanted the guitar to be quite powerful but i couln't get it powerful without drowning out some of the other levels. Now hopefully with your advice i can fix that. I checked out some of your music -it's pretty impressive stuff.