Get rid of the "Pang" noise and its ok
I liked it, add some synth, a heavy bassline, and some length and youve got an amazing track! Ill save this, because it has potential and people need to hear it
(Y'know, more suggestions FANS LATER!!!!)
Youve got somthing great started, i hope you consider my stuff.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.