Too quiet! Dynamics in music are dandy and all, but you should definitely use more compression. I would recommend getting some tools to measure loudness, so you can get a feel for where your track compares to other stuff out there!
I usually export my tracks and play them in foobar2000 alongside some reference tracks, and I check how much ReplayGain shuld be applied (a tool that lets you level match music automatically, very handy when listening to different genres).
A value of -13.00 dB would be considered VERY loud, and something like -4.00 dB very quiet. Compare your songs to stuff similar to what you're going for, and you'll get a feel for what the expected loudness for your track will be!
Additionally, it sounds like the sounds are eating into each other a bit too much, not sure if that's intentional or not.
Otherwise... Some really fresh ideas in there! Maybe a bit overdone (but god
knows I overdo it too like a motherfucker sometimes xD), but if you can find a way to package it in a more accessible way I think it could work.
It's definitely on the stranger side of things, but hey, I sometimes like to hang out there myself, so thumbs up to that! ;)
I has interesting ideas going on. I like the vibe you're going for, but the mix is really bad. I feel like you put so much effort into the complexity of the composition, and I do like the composition itself, but it's drowned out by muddiness. But like I said, you got some really cool stuff going on here. The buildup at around 55 and on I like a lot. I like the weird basses at around 35. Man this would be a good track. All I can say now is look up some tutorials on mixing and improve from there. You got creative talent, that's for sure.
merp, the mastering could've been better. and it seems like everything is jammed together. the guitar in the beginning is just random, it feels like it doesn't fit the track, it's tone just isn't correct. you could definitely expand this into something relaxing though lol, like the DK 64 soundtracks.